Gonna give you my most honest feedback, because I see potential in your work and with the right adjustments you'd be capable of nothing short than masterpieces - You have a really unique and captivating art style, however I really suggest taking the time to refine the art and produce the same or at least similar quality of work for the art used in the cg scenes (i know you've drawn them on your phone, though for future reference it would be best to match a similar kind of quality throughout the game), especially focusing on perfecting the perspectives and anatomy, because it really is a shame some of the drawings have good composition and detail but certain anatomy flaws ruin the scene :( - When it comes to the overall atmosphere in the game, it is depressing and captivating in the most comforting way, like a sweet, sickly and intoxicating environment that you're aware is in the streets/garage and away from the safety of your home, but still offers a sense of belonging and calm you would feel walking back home at night after an emotional breakdown (or at the very least a few routes with calmer characters like Varai and Jeff made me feel that way). - One thing I would be careful about is how you convey certain shocking content, not necessarily for the disturbing nature of it, but whether it is done in good taste or only for the sake of shock value. Knowing that Jeff has been described multiple times as "the most sane member of the group", he has morally one of the most disturbing bad endings of all the members that shows how ironic this descriptor of him is. I don't know whether it was intentional or not, however I believe that it devalued the character greatly, as in the end seems like Dice or even Varai, are truly the most sane and down to earth members in comparison. Certain developments throughout the routes seem to have a sort of forced set of writing choices and twists regarding disturbing and gorey content, which would be delightful had it been unraveled at a slower and maybe more realistic pace. Unfortunately, most of the long lasting shock and anguish that some disturbing real life stories and occurrences leave you with, comes from how human the emotions are before, during or after the event, along with realistic reasoning and regret that might precede or follow an erratic action. I honestly have not seen any of that in Jeff's bad ending, every bit of common sense or doubt about being mistaken was forcibly removed in order for those things to happen, which is highly unrealistic for someone who is supposed to be a reasonable and controlled person, all of this pretty much left me with a really bad impression. Even Jatay's routes were better paced and written, in my opinion. I have also seen some unflattering changes in the story's pace in other routes, that made the situations feel more ridiculous and unrealistic (or "edgy" in other words) than intriguingly disturbing. I would really suggest working on the delivery of these topics and focus on a quieter shock, which is ensured to leave you with questions and stick with you longer than a quick blast into the degeneracy.
All in all, I did like the game with its ups and downs, I keep remembering about it from time to time, mainly because I secretly craved for the existence of a similar experience and the characters are pretty memorable, so you definitely did plenty of things right with your work.
I'd be glad if my feedback helps you in the slightest :) I really hope you will keep working on more projects, because I look forward to see what you will come up next.
thank you very much for the detailed feedback, it was somewhat unexpected, but pleasant for me and very useful, and I'm trying to progress as much as I can.... if you want, you can rate my newer project that will still be updated.... I worked there on my drawing style and writing. actually lbb is basically my first experience writing anything so I really appreciate any help and feedback ♡
about Jeff, I made such a description on purpose, I thought that in this way I would destroy expectations about the character and reveal him from the other side as some psycho obsessed with Varai. I still think he is more adequate than others, at least he looks like that from the very beginning. he is a really nice and caring guy who loves his companions, but he has some problems..... though everyone in this gang has some problems, so I understand your feelings about Jeff
some questionable and unrealistic things can be explained by simulation, yn lbb is like a game within a game, but I will not constantly justify my creativity with this fact, so I will try to work on making scenes and routes better
Nsfw. I was wondering if I have to like finish it all in one sit through of the game so to speak. I tried to keep track of all the routes as i completed them. I might bite the bullet thought and just try all the endings again see if that works out. Thank you for trying to help though i appreciate the effort you went through.
Прошла всех трех, остался Джатай, дико затянуло на самом деле, хочу узнать что там с Пьядаром, но возникли трудности. А как концовку с Джатаем "Мясной рай" получить? Делаю все идентично по гайду, но не выхожу на нее. Ну вот никак. Может, проблема в том, что мне Дайс изначально сказал, что Джатай мне по характеру не подходит, хоть я на старика и вышла? В этом есть какая-то закономерность?
прошу прощения, возможно я накосячил с гайдом, хотя именно с Джатаем ещё проблем вроде не наблюдалось.... в любом случае, попробуйте разные варианты ответов, рано или поздно вы получите концовку
My brother enter my room and ask if i want to join pillow fight with his friend WHEN I IN THE COMMON TONGUE ENDING.I dont know how my brother feel probably disappointing :)))
How to get Jatay's route ??? i play like 14-17 times but i only got Dice Jett and Varai routes ( im not good at english bcz is not my language .SORRY ! )
Oh wait after post this comment and download the dlc i tried to get Jatay's route and after 3 Dice's route i finaly get Jatay's route !!! (I think i like him more than Dice (^v^))
Новелла просто отпад! с нетерпенипем жду другую часть уже про другую банду :) И все же мне очень хотелось бы видеть постельную сцену с Дайсом даже если она была бы жестокая, а так новелла вошла мне в сердечко^^
Hi! (Sorry, I'm writing from a translator) so.. I really like your game!:D I love the poor wormy boy Varai so much, and the f*cked up old man Jatay too<3 (below are a couple of drawings that I drew almost immediately after completing the game, lol) but I have a question about the ending where Padar "undresses", I really want to know what was written behind him in binary code, but unfortunately Padar is far from transparent:(.. you can write the binary code itself or its translation please? in general, once again I will say that I really liked the game and I'm looking forward to the game about another gang of bikers:3
Here is part one of my playthrough! Your art looks amazing and i was excited to try it! I've only played Varai's date but I'm starting to like him alot!
Some of my friends don't have accounts on this site so they can't comment. I'll comment on their behalf.
One of my friends, TC.She drew a picture of dice, but didn't send it out yet. She loves dice. She's Gonna fuck dice.And she say:"er, er, licking his face, will he get angry, ah, and want to see his flustered expression that no one has seen before? er, er, er, er, er, er, er, er, er, er, er"
We Are Crazy About You and your work and your characters, love you and hope you are not scared! Love You Again!
My English is not good, so I use a translator.I realized I hadn't written a review!I love everyone in your game, and I look forward to learning more about the other team characters on Tumblr.
Padar，I think he is mysterious and thoughtful, scary and handsome.🤖🖤
BOSS,He is very cute. I often make strange noises to his cute face,awwww🎲💜
Varai,He is a very cute baby, but also very stubborn child feeling.(I know his age!)👶🏻🐛💛
Jatay,You Bad Old Man! Just kiss him and Scream!He was like a potato that had been gnawed twice and then rolled ten times on the ground.(yep,I'm imitating him.I don't hate him. I like his bad mouth,too.)👴🏻👊🏻💋💔💢
Jeff,I love cat! Worms are cute! But sorry jeff cat are cute!He is a dangerous and charming beast.🐱❤️
Wonderful gameXDDDReally enjoy it a lot.Btw,after I played it,I consider Varai as the most normal guy lol.And he's really cute!Looking forward to your next work:D
Какая же классная рисовка, я балдею. Обожаю подобные новеллы, будет интересно увидеть ваши следующие работы. (Не думал, что больше всех мне понравится некий слюнявый пожилой джентльмен 👍🏻 жаль не дали поласкать деда) А так - спасибо за вкуснятину.
OKAY .This is an interesting game and i dont belive the drawing is from A PHONE i - its just wow! i like the art really!! you did an amizing art (and i am so excited to finish the game!!!)
I downloaded the endings guide and I did them one by one, although there are some endings that end abruptly and it doesn't give me the image of padar saying what the ending is
Day one of trying not to think about fucking the old man: relapsed relapsedrelapsedrelapsedrelapsedrelapsedrelapsedrelapsedrelapsedrelapsedrelapsedrelapsedrelapsedrelapsedrelapsedrelapsedrelapsedrelapsed.... /j
it was a really fun, hot game! for the last two endings, i had to dig trough the code- but the rest are easy to guess. My boy Jeff needed more endings. Your style is very unique and I hope you'll make more games in the future, I'll be waiting! I've played quite a lot of gore vn, and the quality tends to vary. This one is pretty much amazing, suggested if you're into this stuff. I hope you'll become as popular as the authors of btd, this game shows your potential.
lil spoiler/hint: if you're stuck with the last two endings, get creative with the names <3 have fun.
i love this game so much, it's so unique compared to other games in this style. it's a bit difficult to keep track of getting all the endings, but i hope i figure it out for the surprise
oh sorry for all the bugs ill try to fix it all in the next update! the size of the novel is so strange because I can't draw on large canvases on my phone, so I chose almost square size! thank you very much for your feedback!! : D
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Gonna give you my most honest feedback, because I see potential in your work and with the right adjustments you'd be capable of nothing short than masterpieces
- You have a really unique and captivating art style, however I really suggest taking the time to refine the art and produce the same or at least similar quality of work for the art used in the cg scenes (i know you've drawn them on your phone, though for future reference it would be best to match a similar kind of quality throughout the game), especially focusing on perfecting the perspectives and anatomy, because it really is a shame some of the drawings have good composition and detail but certain anatomy flaws ruin the scene :(
- When it comes to the overall atmosphere in the game, it is depressing and captivating in the most comforting way, like a sweet, sickly and intoxicating environment that you're aware is in the streets/garage and away from the safety of your home, but still offers a sense of belonging and calm you would feel walking back home at night after an emotional breakdown (or at the very least a few routes with calmer characters like Varai and Jeff made me feel that way).
- One thing I would be careful about is how you convey certain shocking content, not necessarily for the disturbing nature of it, but whether it is done in good taste or only for the sake of shock value.
Knowing that Jeff has been described multiple times as "the most sane member of the group", he has morally one of the most disturbing bad endings of all the members that shows how ironic this descriptor of him is. I don't know whether it was intentional or not, however I believe that it devalued the character greatly, as in the end seems like Dice or even Varai, are truly the most sane and down to earth members in comparison.
Certain developments throughout the routes seem to have a sort of forced set of writing choices and twists regarding disturbing and gorey content, which would be delightful had it been unraveled at a slower and maybe more realistic pace. Unfortunately, most of the long lasting shock and anguish that some disturbing real life stories and occurrences leave you with, comes from how human the emotions are before, during or after the event, along with realistic reasoning and regret that might precede or follow an erratic action. I honestly have not seen any of that in Jeff's bad ending, every bit of common sense or doubt about being mistaken was forcibly removed in order for those things to happen, which is highly unrealistic for someone who is supposed to be a reasonable and controlled person, all of this pretty much left me with a really bad impression. Even Jatay's routes were better paced and written, in my opinion.
I have also seen some unflattering changes in the story's pace in other routes, that made the situations feel more ridiculous and unrealistic (or "edgy" in other words) than intriguingly disturbing.
I would really suggest working on the delivery of these topics and focus on a quieter shock, which is ensured to leave you with questions and stick with you longer than a quick blast into the degeneracy.
All in all, I did like the game with its ups and downs, I keep remembering about it from time to time, mainly because I secretly craved for the existence of a similar experience and the characters are pretty memorable, so you definitely did plenty of things right with your work.
I'd be glad if my feedback helps you in the slightest :)
I really hope you will keep working on more projects, because I look forward to see what you will come up next.
thank you very much for the detailed feedback, it was somewhat unexpected, but pleasant for me and very useful, and I'm trying to progress as much as I can.... if you want, you can rate my newer project that will still be updated.... I worked there on my drawing style and writing. actually lbb is basically my first experience writing anything so I really appreciate any help and feedback ♡
about Jeff, I made such a description on purpose, I thought that in this way I would destroy expectations about the character and reveal him from the other side as some psycho obsessed with Varai. I still think he is more adequate than others, at least he looks like that from the very beginning. he is a really nice and caring guy who loves his companions, but he has some problems..... though everyone in this gang has some problems, so I understand your feelings about Jeff
some questionable and unrealistic things can be explained by simulation, yn lbb is like a game within a game, but I will not constantly justify my creativity with this fact, so I will try to work on making scenes and routes better
Where can i find the ending guide ??? :(
Nvm i found it lmfao
lol
BTW I PLAYED YOUR GAME ITS SOOOOO GOOOD LOVE THE CRAZINESS AND ART 👍👍💗 was a little hard to get all endings but was worth it lmaoo
thank you! im glad you finished the game
I played all the routes and nothing with padar happened. I used the ending guide and followed it to a t. could i get some help?
im sorry i dunno how to help... are you sure you got all endings? maybe you missed something? what version are you playing (sfw/nsfw)?
Nsfw. I was wondering if I have to like finish it all in one sit through of the game so to speak. I tried to keep track of all the routes as i completed them. I might bite the bullet thought and just try all the endings again see if that works out. Thank you for trying to help though i appreciate the effort you went through.
if it doesnt work out try another version of the game ok...
I will thank you for your help as well. I appreciate you taking the time
varai is so cute that i just wanna hug him and give him a kiss on the cheek!!!!!!!
wash your lips with soap afterwards ! (and yourself)
Прошла всех трех, остался Джатай, дико затянуло на самом деле, хочу узнать что там с Пьядаром, но возникли трудности. А как концовку с Джатаем "Мясной рай" получить? Делаю все идентично по гайду, но не выхожу на нее. Ну вот никак. Может, проблема в том, что мне Дайс изначально сказал, что Джатай мне по характеру не подходит, хоть я на старика и вышла? В этом есть какая-то закономерность?
UPD. Я играю в дополнение 18+
прошу прощения, возможно я накосячил с гайдом, хотя именно с Джатаем ещё проблем вроде не наблюдалось.... в любом случае, попробуйте разные варианты ответов, рано или поздно вы получите концовку
UPD: гайд теперь правильный
they r all so SILLY OMG not really u jatay tho...
jatay is the silliest
My brother enter my room and ask if i want to join pillow fight with his friend WHEN I IN THE COMMON TONGUE ENDING.I dont know how my brother feel probably disappointing :)))
LMAO
How to get Jatay's route ??? i play like 14-17 times but i only got Dice Jett and Varai routes ( im not good at english bcz is not my language .SORRY ! )
Oh wait after post this comment and download the dlc i tried to get Jatay's route and after 3 Dice's route i finaly get Jatay's route !!! (I think i like him more than Dice (^v^))
Новелла просто отпад! с нетерпенипем жду другую часть уже про другую банду :) И все же мне очень хотелось бы видеть постельную сцену с Дайсом даже если она была бы жестокая, а так новелла вошла мне в сердечко^^
спасибо большое!
я обязательно добавлю концовку с Дайсом, если не в этой, то по крайней мере в другой новелле
Спасибо большое! вы лучший! Кстати ваша новела пка что самая лучшая из всех что я играла)а прошла я далеко не одну^^
The story is really nice,I can't wait to see more of it.
There is a wanted poster in the garage,is that guy Duke?
thanku! also yea thats Duke but Dice and Jeff dont know that its him
ohh cute drawing!! thank you sm!!!!!
also i dont remember the translation of binary code sorry......
ah, what a pity, but okay, everything is fine:)
Here is part one of my playthrough! Your art looks amazing and i was excited to try it! I've only played Varai's date but I'm starting to like him alot!
thank you so much im really glad you enjoyed my game!!!
im very happy to see the playthrough of my game
I can't wait to play more and meet the other guys!
Some of my friends don't have accounts on this site so they can't comment. I'll comment on their behalf.
One of my friends, TC.She drew a picture of dice, but didn't send it out yet. She loves dice. She's Gonna fuck dice.And she say:"er, er, licking his face, will he get angry, ah, and want to see his flustered expression that no one has seen before? er, er, er, er, er, er, er, er, er, er, er"
We Are Crazy About You and your work and your characters, love you and hope you are not scared! Love You Again!
I hope I'm still cute to you! I'm not surprised!It's just that it's a little crazy!🥺🥺
i dunno what to say its just cute and funny
My English is not good, so I use a translator.I realized I hadn't written a review!I love everyone in your game, and I look forward to learning more about the other team characters on Tumblr.
Padar，I think he is mysterious and thoughtful, scary and handsome.🤖🖤
BOSS,He is very cute. I often make strange noises to his cute face,awwww🎲💜
Varai,He is a very cute baby, but also very stubborn child feeling.(I know his age!)👶🏻🐛💛
Jatay,You Bad Old Man! Just kiss him and Scream!He was like a potato that had been gnawed twice and then rolled ten times on the ground.(yep,I'm imitating him.I don't hate him. I like his bad mouth,too.)👴🏻👊🏻💋💔💢
Jeff,I love cat! Worms are cute! But sorry jeff cat are cute!He is a dangerous and charming beast.🐱❤️
I missed a line. I hope I didn't miss any more!Like your style, line, character design, there are some that do not come to mind.♡(*´∀｀*)人(*´∀｀*)♡
omg your rewiev is literally the cutiest one i have ever read im smiling
thank you so much!!!🎲🪱🍆🫀
I really like varai! I want to be his mommy to protect him, He is a lovely and poor child, and my English is poor.But I love every boys！
you would be a really good mom for Varai for sure
Wonderful gameXDDDReally enjoy it a lot.Btw,after I played it,I consider Varai as the most normal guy lol.And he's really cute!Looking forward to your next work:D
thank you!!! well maybe Varai is really normal... at least he doesnt hurt mc
THIS IS SO GOOD!!! Love how strange and unique it is!!
thank you sm!
CAN I JUST SAY THE ART STYLE IS AWESOME!!!!!!1 I AM SO IN LOVE WITH JEFFF MAN AND THE CHARACTERS ARE SO UNIQUE!!!!!!!! WAAA
thank you!
Какая же классная рисовка, я балдею. Обожаю подобные новеллы, будет интересно увидеть ваши следующие работы. (Не думал, что больше всех мне понравится некий слюнявый пожилой джентльмен 👍🏻 жаль не дали поласкать деда) А так - спасибо за вкуснятину.
благодарю за отзыв, мне очень приятно! ожидайте новую новеллу в скором времени
Is there maybe a guide? I am having a bit of trouble >_< I do love it so far though!
yea sure! there is the file called "ending guide (eng and rus).txt"
Oh awesome! Thank you! 🖤🖤
I love your drawing style and absolutely everthing in this game :D u should definitely combine more guro nd nsfw in the next games
thanks!! I have to improve my drawing skill to draw more poarn but l'll try....
OKAY .This is an interesting game and i dont belive the drawing is from A PHONE i - its just wow! i like the art really!! you did an amizing art (and i am so excited to finish the game!!!)
I'm very glad that you like my game art. I don't have a normal computer or a graphics tablet so I try my best
the new game will be drawn in a classic ms paint :] next level!
played and 100%ed the game a few days back now and. gotta say. "wasted time" ending has been taking up most of my mind the entire time..yikes
varai was my only solace after that
did you enjoy the tongue in your eyehole
Varai would like to be in your place :]
well i sure as heck didn't enjoy the fact that he went through my brain like what the heck CAROL get outta my thoughts you spiky-shouldered bastard
carroll*!!!!
oh i know but i just call him carol because it was funnier to me and he's mean anyway
he'd make a great carol irl frankly
jeff and varai were the only ones cool enough to be called by their real names..and i don't think i even mentioned jatay by name just ever
jatay being scary and unloved as usual
я еще не начал играть в эту игру, но я чувствую что она будет великолепной
дождись релиза перевода...... осталось немного.....
Ура,победа,наконец-то у меня будет не ломанный перевод:D
I get to drink beer with Jeff, nice game !
i like it so much that you enjoyed the beer ending more than other nasty or gorey endings
youre so cute, thank you sm for playing, for comment and rating!
Thank you ! You are too kind !
Can I ask, does the Player survive the "Yummy !" ending in Dice route ? I'm not exactly sure what to take from it.
Also, I lost a contact lense when he licked my face, he probably ate it, should I mention it to him ? /joke
Edit because of typo, sorry !
the ending is neutral, so the player survives
Thank you !
I've known Jeff for less than a day and he's already my little sick and twisted meow meow
glad
i can't get the bloody ending with padar
pd: hail varai
try harder my friend
i dont know how to help sorry
many people tell me that they got all the endings just swear that they got everything and in the end they still forget some one
oh well nsfw endings always end abruptly....
if you want to see Padar's ending so bad i can give you some save file to see this ending! im really sorry!!
Day one of trying not to think about fucking the old man: relapsed relapsedrelapsedrelapsedrelapsedrelapsedrelapsedrelapsedrelapsedrelapsedrelapsedrelapsedrelapsedrelapsedrelapsedrelapsedrelapsedrelapsed.... /jdid you create your account just to send this
yup, not my proudest moment,,
I LOVE JeFF HES ADORABLE
he kisses u in response
im glad you like!!! varai kisses u and infects you
and dice just.... idk hes bad at kissing
will the nsfw update be coming out? or was it cancelled?
I'm going to finish the update soon... I hope so at least
Just by the designs and plot, I am going to LOVE this.
my smile has become e l o n g a t e d
I really loved this game! the concept is quite unique.
Have you considered doing an ending guide? I seem to be missing some of them and I really want to know what Padar's surprise is
thanku! dw about ending guide ill write it
just wait for the next update
varai i would DIE FOR YOU
same
it was a really fun, hot game! for the last two endings, i had to dig trough the code- but the rest are easy to guess. My boy Jeff needed more endings. Your style is very unique and I hope you'll make more games in the future, I'll be waiting! I've played quite a lot of gore vn, and the quality tends to vary. This one is pretty much amazing, suggested if you're into this stuff. I hope you'll become as popular as the authors of btd, this game shows your potential.
lil spoiler/hint: if you're stuck with the last two endings, get creative with the names <3 have fun.
awww friend thank you so much!!! dont worry ill add more content soon and Jeff will have new endings!! im so glad that you liked it : D
PLEASE I LOVE JEFF SO MUCH ID LOVE TO SEE MORE JEFF
check wild biker boys for more Jeff content 🤲🏻
i love this game so much, it's so unique compared to other games in this style. it's a bit difficult to keep track of getting all the endings, but i hope i figure it out for the surprise
thank you!!! if you need some help with endings you can text me! : D
jatay my beloved <3
wormfriend!!!
oh sorry for all the bugs ill try to fix it all in the next update! the size of the novel is so strange because I can't draw on large canvases on my phone, so I chose almost square size! thank you very much for your feedback!! : D
thank you for all your good words!!!